One day early in the morning Jane went to pack her things and leave for the big day ahead of her. Frantically, she picked up her things hoped in the car and drove to the air port. Jane was going to France with her friend Anna. Anna & Jane where going on a business trip for the weekend once they gotten to the air port Anna family were waving by too her Anna thought to her self ”where would l find Jane. soon Anna turned she found Jane they turned around and headed to the security the man said in security can l check your passport?’, he asked………….
Dear Abby I enjoyed how you repeated there names so we didn’t think of anna instead of jane or vice versa the dad wavers you used was dialogue I couldn’t find the other one my feed back is make it a bit clearer with dad wavers kind regards Alivia
hi Alivia thanks for the feedback but l the dad wavers that you thought are not what l put in my story bad luck. kind regards Abby